Thursday, August 16, 2007@10:03 AM

Spectrum Light

Story by: WZ
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/spectrum
Reviewed by: Glamour_Diva

Title – 4.5/5
Personally, I thought Spectrum Light wasn’t a perfect title for your stories. In my opinion, your title should’ve been related to the word ‘season’ or something similar. However, Autumn's Mazurka, Spring's Prelude, Winter’s Nocturne and Summer's Fugue were very attractive titles, so it made up for the lost marks.

Forewords – 9/10
Okay, so your overall forewords wasn’t that thrilling. But the one for Autumn’s Mazurka was amazing!! You gave quotes, introduced the characters and all… good job!!

Appearance (Poster and Background) – 8/10
Your poster was gorgeous!! Though, you may be wondering why you only got an eight. Well, although your poster was gorgeous, there was a flaw at the bottom of your poster. There were two Chinese words, which were a huge turnoff!! And I thought the background was a bit dull…you should’ve added a background also. Just a suggestion…=D

Originality and Creativity – 14/15
Your story was very original!! However, some scenes were a bit familiar to me. Don’t worry; you got most of your marks back at the part where Ariel killed Chun!! It was cruel, yet fascinating!!

Plot – 15/15
I have never seen such a plot in Winglin before!! At least I’ve never read of it… So you got… Full marks!!

Story Flow – 10/10
I enjoyed reading the story very much!! I can totally catch up with the story flow!!

Language: (Spelling, Grammar) – 12.5/15
No spelling mistakes!! Your grammar was also excellent!! However there were some minor grammar errors.

For example:
She has an intellectual and quick mind. (had)

and some typing mistakes…

For example:
He had finally found a personal assistant (that) would keep….

Overall, it was fine!!

Writing Style – 10/10
I loved your writing style!! So that is why, you achieved a perfect score!!

Reader Friendly – 9/10
From your writing style, I can see that you are an easy-going person. But you didn’t show it enough!! I know that you leave an author’s note after (or before) your posts, however, you should probably reply the comments of your readers personally also.

Total: 92/100
I enjoyed your story very much!! Honestly, I though it was very good. Good job!

Bonus: 0/3
Sorry, you didn’t link us back at your forewords. =P