Sunday, August 26, 2007@5:00 PM Author: WZ
Story Title: Rising Sun [One-Shots]
Story URL: winglin.net/fanfic/TVXQ
1* Title - 3/5
It was a bit obvious, given that Rising Sun is one of DBSK’s song titles, but I’ve never seen another story, or set of stories for that matter, with that title. Sometimes I guess the most obvious titles are the most eye-catching. However, your one-shot sub-title, ‘A Fated Devil’ was a lot more eye-catching, even though it didn’t exactly roll off the tongue.
2* Forwards - 7/10
The forwards were a bit brief, but I liked the quote in the beginning. It sounded very mysterious and served to draw the reader further into reading the story. It was a good start, but maybe you could have expanded a little more on that. Then again it was a one-shot, so brevity was the whole idea.
3* Appearance - 8/10
Despite what you said, I liked the poster! I didn’t really like the way Junsu’s nose got cut off (just kidding!) but overall it looked pretty presentable. Font was easy to read against the simple background. On the whole, no quibbles, save for the fact that it wasn’t as shiny and glossy as some of the more sophisticated stories out there.
4* Originality and Creativity - 13/15
You mentioned that your inspirations were Tokyo Holiday and a Chinese novel that you had read. I’m not too sure which novel it was, but the story seemed to have some independent thought that went into it (because quite frankly I saw little resemblance to Tokyo Holiday – a good thing really!) I liked the orange juice incident, and Changmin’s responses to Yunho’s ‘Hug’ solo were simply adorable! So I had to give you points for that. Of course, I could be totally wrong and everything could be copied from the Chinese novel, but I’ll give you the benefit of the doubt. ;)
5* Plot - 12/15
The plot was simple and focused on the affinity between Yunho and SeulGi – which made it an easy read. However, because of that it could also turn against you and make the story too short and/or simplistic. Personally I liked it, but there were bits which seemed a little too good to be true. I would have liked to see more of Yunho’s and SeulGi’s characters develop, but that would probably have taken more than two chapters to accomplish.
6* Story Flow - 9/10
The chapters continued on straight from where they left off, and I actually noticed that your updates were pretty quick as well. Good, because that keeps the story fresh and fast-paced.
7* Language: (Spelling, Grammar) - 12/15
There were a couple of spelling mistakes here and there, but it was nothing that a bit of editing wouldn’t fix. You could have a look at the grammar as well, because sometimes the tenses didn’t match up.
8* Writing Style: 8/10
Your writing style is pretty easy-going and uncomplicated, which makes it easy to read and follow your story. I thought it was appropriate to the tone of the story as well, because it helped move the plot along. To tie in with the above category though, I would suggest tailoring your writing style to include some editing after writing to get rid of any inconsistencies that may affect your style.
9* Reader Friendly: 10/10
You were constantly trying to make contact with your readers, expressing your appreciation by replying to comments and by attaching author’s notes at the start and end of the chapters. I actually enjoyed your little sound-bytes immensely, so top marks for that!
Total: 74/100
Bonus: 0/3 – No links as far as I could see.